Week 13 A.S

 “Today is the day”, maddie yelled as the doorbell rang. She opened the door and shrieked with excitement. She told her family, “my doll is here”. It had orange hair, big green eyes and a freekish smile. She named it mia. She went to bed hugging her doll and waiting for the next day to come. The next morning she found it on her dresser wearing a tutu.

“I didn't put that on”, she thought loudly. Or put her there. She hugged the doll as she went downstairs to get breakfast. She felt a very sharp pain in her arm…


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  1. AnonymousDecember 6, 2020 at 3:46 AM

    I loved how you used dialogue to start your story and how you ended suggesting that something is not quite right. I wonder what caused the sharp pain.

    Ms Young
    Team 100WC
    London

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