Week 20/21 Gabbie

 While I was biking, my bike suddenly got stuck. I noticed that it was only stuck at the back wheel.I tried to pull it out but it was no use but I also noticed that the mud became quick sand but good thing that it wasn't quick. I had to bring some food from the store and it wasn’t that far so I tied my bike to a pole and left. What i didn’t know is that i have been gone for an hour. When I came back to my bike it was gone. The only thing I found was the front wheel...


  1. Greetings from Australia Gabbie. Congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge. You left me wondering what happened to the rest of your bike? I liked your play on words about the quick sand not being quick. Try to find other words to use for ‘but’, it will make your writing more interesting. 😊

  2. Hello, loved your story although the use of "but" is a bit much try finding new words for but like although, yet and nevertheless and nonetheless! Overall your use of words and intriguing suspense can really may someone like me forget about the "buts". Your friend: Muna Sharif

    1. Sorry, for the may I was trying to write make.


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