Week 21 Natanim

 The gold rock   WEEK 21 


There was a kid called Jack. He was living with his dog Teddy.

One day he was going on a trip and he was  packing his bag. After his trip he was taking taddy walk and teddy smelled something and then the teddy started going right and Jack said teddy come then teddy woof woof. Ok said jack, and teddy walked him and they both saw a gold rock. They were little Jack wanted to take one rock but it was  but it was heavier than they expected…

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  1. UnknownFebruary 23, 2021 at 8:33 AM

    I like the story! I saw that one of your words said taddy I think you ment teddy.

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  2. UnknownFebruary 23, 2021 at 8:36 AM

    I think the storys great but I realized that some things dont really make sense to go after each other you should read over it one more time next time!

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  3. UnknownFebruary 23, 2021 at 8:42 AM

    I see some parts of your story don't make, and I realized that you might want to connect some parts to make it less confusing, But otherwise it was great!!!

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